Forum Discussion: Correcting, improving and paraphrasing

Consider the following sentences. All of them have problems of various kinds. Rewrite the sentences to improve the style and avoid misleading. Look at the ideas suggested by fellow students. Feel free to comment. When all your groupmates post their suggestions, you can compare them with those of native English proof-readers.

1.       Observing the average values of some metrics, one can conclude that X is equal to 3.

2.       We suppose that the heterogeneity of these indexes is mostly caused by the presence of a large number of Zs.

3.       As it is highlighted in the scheme reported in Figure 1, the number of the participants didn’t change. 

4.       Nevertheless, in general, it can be observed that all the patients that participated in the survey achieved a significant level of improvement with regard to their motor skills. 

5.       In this paper we mainly focus on the mechanisms that are available to improve the performance of the learners who had taken part in the interview. 

6.       By eating vegetables alone, we cannot understand how some vegans do not have a deficiency in this vitamin. 

7.       In order to test our hypothesis, we gave a variety of the sample articles to a group of 10 professionals who, being native English speakers, could make judgments and corrections. 

8.       Rakoff (2015) expects the use of VR technology to go up rapidly in the near future. 

9.       We adopted a solution to carry out a test of all educational software tools available on the market. 

10.   The topic of fires which are not caused by human activities have always attracted attention of researchers, that resulted in a number of papers describing their affects.